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Get Out Of The House
After we had worked on improving our writing with using exciting sentences and using skeleton plots, we had to write a the following piece as our writing sample.
Once in an very strange valley there was an old Victorian hall up for sale it was the new big thing in the town but the hall was to beautiful and to much money for the people of strongealot Dragon Place to buy. There were weird things you will not understand well while here I go there are ghosts!!!! In the hall very weird ones’ indeed the names of the ghost’s were Hogan who was a butler and the rest were unnamed because they were the servant’s. Well the ghost can not live the hall there no reason they can’t go but it was a police rule anyway. It was important that the ghost’s liked the new owner’s. A lot of new people in stangealot Dragon Place because everyone look’s very strange here anyway the first people that came to look at the hall were an family of five The family come’s in the ghost let out an massive roar. The family ran away a drove far away. Next and head teacher come’s along he looked tough. The ghosts said boo and he was gone. Finally there were a young couple they were quite perky the ghosts try to scare them off but they weren’t scared not one bit. The day after they had they had come they become friend’s so the young couple buyt the house and live happily every after with the ghost’s in the beautiful hall.
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